I like the beginning of this thread. Sort of a WWII underground operations feel to it, people using codenames and deceit and trickery etc. "Jovan, your OSS contacts have pulled out. Come, work with us at the GRU, we have much better chance of success against the chocolate chip cookies. And, after the we win this war, we will be such good friends to your country and respect your sovereignty unlike the filthy capitalist swine of the west."
Then chance encounters with former operatives, and layer after layer of deceit is pulled back to reveal the truth. The protagonist had been coerced to work with the lesser of two goods.
Great stuff, great drama, especially when Sword gave away his forum persona (big mistake, IMO), though I think the character of Snipercraft could have used a little more sympathy. I guess character clashes do happen, but it sort of detracts from the story. I think he would have made an excellent 'understanding colonel' type, sorta of righting the wrongs of his comrades, but in a very serious, professional manner.
After that the writing sort of falls apart. Just a pathetic trade of insults, no real effective cover up, no clever counter move, just insults. I would have liked to see the character of Eyebeat develop more, plus that Vagina ravager guy. Sort of step it up to the higher echelons, sorta make it more political.
All in all, I'd have to give it 3 stars, mainly due to it being summer and it's the season for comedy posts (btw, please vote for me in the 'Best Sandwich Maker' post), and not much other drama out there. We'll just have to wait til September for the heavy-weight drama to begin.
