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Off Topic => General Off Topic => Topic started by: Torben on March 13, 2013, 11:21:53 pm

Title: english guys: help me phrase something here please:
Post by: Torben on March 13, 2013, 11:21:53 pm
ya so i know what i wanna say but cant in correct english,  just sounds gay.  would be helpfull if you could rephrase especially the first part,  should sound a bit professional.  I wanna send this shit away today and its 11 pm here and I dunno anyone else i could ask -.-  (btw this aint concerning me ; )

To whom it may concern,
starting April 2013, I will take a break from modeling due to private issues,  and return in January 2014.
Great thanks for the numerous shootings, on stays, Castings, Catwalks and direct bookings!  I am looking forward to a successful year 2014!

so the first sentence is supposed to state that i wanna do a "creative break/pause"  but im not sure that is actually a word in english,  dont really wanna say shit about private issues...
the second sentence is ok imo,  but pls help me rephrase the first one.

also i am drunk which doesnt help my english skills,  fuck.
Title: Re: english guys: help me phrase something here please:
Post by: Zlisch_The_Butcher on March 14, 2013, 12:28:26 am
lol Torben is a top model, post a picture please!
Title: Re: english guys: help me phrase something here please:
Post by: Carthan on March 14, 2013, 12:34:17 am
How about

"To whom it may concern:   
     Starting in April of this year, I will be taking a break from modeling because of some personal events, however I will return to modeling in January of 2014. "

Probably could be better, but I think it is decent

Edited for lulz : IM NOT ENGLISH IM 'MERICAN!
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Title: Re: english guys: help me phrase something here please:
Post by: Kafein on March 14, 2013, 12:42:10 am
Don't forget the "sincerely" and signing part. That's like, half the emotional content of a message.
Title: Re: english guys: help me phrase something here please:
Post by: Carthan on March 14, 2013, 12:43:33 am
What is this "Emotional content" of which you speak?
Title: Re: english guys: help me phrase something here please:
Post by: Kafein on March 14, 2013, 12:44:08 am
What is this "Emotional content" of which you speak?

Nevermind.
Title: Re: english guys: help me phrase something here please:
Post by: enigmatic_stranger on March 14, 2013, 08:41:30 am
Pics or GTFO.
Title: Re: english guys: help me phrase something here please:
Post by: Torben on March 14, 2013, 12:15:15 pm
no no no,  this was for a friend.  i  am a fat old computernerd.  but seriously sending business emails when drunk is not the best idea -.-